A day to celebrate LADIES a poem of affection,, thoughts welcomed?

A novice Poet I become, an experienced soul I am,, comments and "your" thoughts on how you felt when reading.





Color my World"





Clear blue skies, Palm Trees that blow whispers in night,


Oceans green blue and gray, caps of enchanting white,


Sands of spattered cream, shells that endlessly shine,


Lady Godiva appears, my vision of goddess is consigned.





To this picture of beauty in front of me, oh the joy I feel,


Naked brushstrokes flow freely, my soul begins to heal.


You color my world, bedroom eyes matching the calming sea,


Mesmerized by your movements, you set my inhibitions free.


Mountains they rise, the backdrop of this place quiet, serene,


My heart on fire, you color my world, your soul, pristine.


Completing the cycle, the cycle of love, just you and me...











Lay with me now, and.... "Color my World"

A day to celebrate LADIES a poem of affection,, thoughts welcomed?
its so......i cant describe it! Its really good though.
Reply:The color of your world is brown. The same shade that drops from the rear end of a male bovine.
Reply:BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!








Your poem reminded me of the artwork of Steve Hanks. Google him and you will agree with me, I think.
Reply:nice poem %26amp; sure there shud be a day to clebrate ladies an international day %26amp; make it a holiday day brother
Reply:Its pretty good ill admit
Reply:I loved it I give u a 10. GOD BLESS
Reply:its thoughtful,creative and soo relaxing! how 'bout making it into a song?!?! good luck! ^_^
Reply:It's nice, it makes me think of two people in a log cabin in the moutains overlooking the sea. The woman standing on the blacony the wind blowing her dress around. The guy standing back watching her, painting a portrait of her. Then he becomes so taken with her, that he asks her to be with him.
Reply:I LOVE IT!!!!! it's so romantic and surreal. i felt like i was in this basement that was your painting studio and you were reading it. it's a great poem
Reply:Terrible. Trite. This is like an imitation of an amalgamation of all the corny love poems in a Reader's Digest collection. It's full of cliches and insincere parroting of grandiose phrases.





It would be better to use honest, real feelings and perceptions, and genuine images that are your own.
Reply:i feel LIGHT at first... and then SMOTHERED!





the same feeling when i've had too much sugar!!!

loops